Do you think this sentence is too long?

[Ste11aeres]

I have to write something for the discussion board of an online class. DO you think the following sentence is too long for my classmates to understand? :nerd:

One is left wondering if a Greek person would have thought he was intrinsically better than others, much as the Nazis considered themselves genetically and intrinsically superior to ?lower? races, or if, on the other hand the Greek person considered himself similar in nature to others, but different in having been lucky enough to have been born into a superior culture.

That's a "mental cog" at the top. I thought that was an actual phrase, but an internet search tells me otherwise.

 

[Peace]

I see nothing wrong with the sentence nor the length.

 

[Sparticus]

I like the question you are asking. How do you feel about the below sentence? Are you comfortable with it?

I have to write something for the discussion board of an online class. DO you think the following sentence is too long for my classmates to understand? :nerd:

One is left wondering if a Greek person would have thought he was intrinsically better than others, much as the Nazis considered themselves genetically and intrinsically superior to “lower” races, or if, on the other hand the Greek person considered himself similar in nature to others, but different in having been lucky enough to have been born into a superior culture.

That's a "mental cog" at the top. I thought that was an actual phrase, but an internet search tells me otherwise.

 

[Loomis]

There is nothing at all wrong with your sentence. Modern journalism has led us to believe sentences should be short and to the point.

How about this sentence? It is the first sentence of Charles Dicken's A Tale of Two Cities:


It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair, we had everything before us, we had nothing before us, we were all going direct to heaven, we were all going direct the other way - in short, the period was so far like the present period, that some of its noisiest authorities insisted on its being received, for good or for evil, in the superlative degree of comparison only.

 

[Loomis]

Ernest Hemingway was the master at writing great literature using simple words and short sentences:

"Manuel drank his brandy. He felt sleepy himself. It was too hot to go out into the town. Besides there was nothing to do. He wanted to see Zurito. He would go to sleep while he waited."

 

[Ste11aeres]

Ernest Hemingway was the master at writing great literature useing simple words and short sentences:

"Manuel drank his brandy. He felt sleepy himself. It was too hot to go out into the town. Besides there was nothing to do. He wanted to see Zurito. He would go to sleep while he waited."

Reading that drives me crazy! I guess I'll stick to my longer-sentence style.

 

[Loomis]

Reading that drives me crazy! I guess I'll stick to my longer-sentence style.

I like your writing style. It is good. The meaning is clear. I agree you shouldn't change.

 

[Loomis]

I can't resist posting another complex sentence. This one is by a memorable aspie writer of great stories:

?Men have called me mad; but the question is not yet settled, whether madness is or is not the loftiest intelligence? whether much that is glorious? whether all that is profound? does not spring from disease of thought? from moods of mind exalted at the expense of the general intellect.? (Edgar Allan Poe)