I have a lot of experience developing and making presentations.
I'd be happy to make some "technical" suggestions if you like, but I need to set the scene a bit first: "Suggestions" is a nice way to put "constructive criticism", which in turn is a nice way to say "I think you need to make some significant changes"
If you're happy with the form and structure you currently have, there's no point in my spending time on it, so I'd like to know in advance if you're prepared to make changes.
One criticism that's been made earlier in the thread (IIRC), but bears repeating: there are far too many words on the slides. At the moment it's more like the handout material than the slides for a presentation.
